'''mah emo poems fr the real emo purple people licker....'''

hiiiii guys....this is my first post ever...hope u emo buddies will like mah poems....



here is my first poem.....


Thinking of all i love n all i hate,
thoughts of suicide..thinking..its my fate,
i think of all the time i used to laugh
and now..i wish i'd just die,
how did so much misery come into mah life..,
n now all i have ARRRRRRRRRRRRR thoughts of suicide,
crying everynite..is not the way to live
heck..i'm still kid...,
i should be out n hanging with all mah friends,
but these thoughts of suicide..haunt mah head,
will they care..when i'm gone,
when nothing left...expect mah thoughts,
n this small poem telling everyone,,
i'l be no more here bout in an hour...,
dont try to save me..
just..save I am a potato tears...,
nothing can stop me...,
coz i have the thoughts of suicide..,,
heres to the end..mah dear frnd..,'''
.............................................


here is my second poem

in my bedroom you will find:
a boy in the corner does cry

wishing he could just die.

tears are like his friends.

theres no hope

all he can do is mope.

he's always alone

he cuts himself to ease his pain

and cries in the rain

he always wears black.

he gives up on what he does lack

he want to die

he lives in a lie.

Always wondering why?

When will it end?

No one could ever mend him.

he's sick of everyone.

he wants to be free.

And that boy is me.

u'l see me in pain
u'l hear my screams
coz my life is over
Or so it seems

u'l watch me fade
u'l hear my lie
i'l see my scars
& u'l watch me die

u'l see me cry
& wish me luck

so Kiss me goodnight
now u can see the tears
Watch my ghost
& watch me disappear
coz m dead.....'''

............................................


here is mah third poem

when i'm dead,
your tears may flow...
but i wont know
cry for me now..instead,
when i'm dead
u'l send flowers...
but i wont see
send them now..instead,
when m dead
u'l say words of praise...but i wont hear
so say some good words now'''

.........................................................



hope u all emo's like mah poems.....i'l post some more poems here...'''''

thnxx to visit mah thread....

Advertisement

wait what ? erm I read the poem were you wrote properly, but why did you wrote like a retard on the other ones ? :/ really I can't read it.. The one I managed to read is ok imo though. (:

I can't read this either, but this makes me sad nonetheless.

Cloveraile wrote: I can't read this either, but this makes me sad nonetheless.

the murder of the English language is what makes me sad.



innocent, some advice:

- check your spelling and grammar
- use some form of structure
- post it simple (don't use double spacing, or colored text, or small fonts)
- proofread (does it make sense?)

http://forum.emobucket.com/kittenskill-s-guide-to-amateur-poetry-t30302.html

CUTTING AND SUICIDE THEMES
Just be aware that these themes add to the negative 'emo' stereotype

http://forum.emobucket.com/poem-forum-rules-t25736.html

---

thnxx for the advice.....this is mah first post ever....anyhows if still u people cant read it...then i cant do anythng....anyhwz.....here's mah other poem


BROKEN

My heart is broken
But my real feelings are unspoken
i feel so empty inside
im running out of places to hide
everyone has lied
Alone within broken thoughts of my death
waiting for my last breath
My life is breaking into millions of pieces
as my pain depresion hurt and sorrow increases
im broken
ive been awoken
Because of peoples words and actions
im a ugly attractions
Breaking apart farther from life
trapped cuz of my strife
im broken because im standing alone
without ever being really known
im not in place with the world
Lost and different
But why do they ridicule me for being different?
im broken because of people
im broken because of life
My heart is broken
im broken
broken like sticks
and i cant be fix.......

dude you sound like your gonna kill urself? am i not right?...what it seems like

gawd some people on here are so mean. anyway, those were really good! really sad, but good.

cupcakexoxo wrote: gawd some people on here are so mean.

mean? how so?
isnt it a good thing to make constructive criticism?


innocent, broken is an improvement
but it doesnt flow
it feels like the rhymes are forced.
how long did it take you to write?

also

- check your spelling and grammar
- use some form of structure
- post it simple (don't use double spacing, or colored text, or small fonts)
- proofread (does it make sense?)

you edited the first lot so they are in huge font (not recommended) and in coloured text (definitely not recommended), and you didnt fix any of the problems (poor spelling and double spacing)

thnxx alot for the comment

''cupcakexoxo''

---

n yaaap...m smiling in mah pic...bt inside...m dying.....

---

n m so glad that u lik mah poems....only emo buddies can understand emo buddies....

the name of a poem is

---

'''NO ONE KNEW ME'''

No one knew me shy boy in school
No one knew me because i was'nt cool

No one knew what i went through at home
No one knew that i felt so alone

No one knew that i cuts myself every night
No one knew because i kept the scars out of sight

No one knew that there was hurt shown in my eyes
NO one knew that i sits at home in my room and cries

No one knew that i once put a gun to my head
No one knew that i wishes i was dead

No one knew that i just want to run
No one knew that i wanted to just melt under the sun

No one knew that i pops so many pills
No one knew just how i really feels

No one knew the hurt i feels inside
No one knew that my soul has already died

KK TO THE RESCUE!!

-.-
whats new.

*sigh*
i give up.
your poems will remain shitty if you cant take some simple advice

KittensKill wrote: *sigh*
i give up.
your poems will remain shitty if you cant take some simple advice

Haha. You make me laugh :]
I don't mean that in a satirical way either.

Can you at least take the time to use correct fucking punctuation? It insults me as a writer to see you write poetry without using correct grammar. Poetry is the art of using the English Language in a way that captivates and moves. If you can't do that, it's just stupid.