Exhale the breath.
Forget it all.
Let the water take you,
Before the fall.
Don't think of anything.
Die like a sin.
Feet touch the ground.
Sand tucks you in.
Don't think of living.
You're too far down.
Breathe in the water,
and let yourself drown.
Keep yourself grounded.
Don't open your eyes.
Pray someone won't find you,
You've made perfect lies.
I don't know, it was stuck in my head, do you like it? : D
Edit: Fixed. Thanks, Andrew.
This popped into my head...
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This popped into my head...
by Angeliquely on 06-30-2009 3:17 am
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by iamthewicked on 06-30-2009 3:52 am
i like it alot.
(you okay with critizism?<-- i cant spell that lol)
i could like it more.
if it just popped in your head, then of course, you can always make it better!^-^
its really very beautiful,
yet i feel like its missing something...
i dont know.
good job<3
(you okay with critizism?<-- i cant spell that lol)
i could like it more.
if it just popped in your head, then of course, you can always make it better!^-^
its really very beautiful,
yet i feel like its missing something...
i dont know.
good job<3
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by Kiyoshi on 06-30-2009 5:40 am
i really like it! 
so pretty, you are talent at poetry..^^! <3
i really like this:
"Feet touch the ground.
Sand tucks you in."
those two line give me a lot of imagery..so nice
so pretty, you are talent at poetry..^^! <3
i really like this:
"Feet touch the ground.
Sand tucks you in."
those two line give me a lot of imagery..so nice
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by fearless on 07-06-2009 2:07 am
yeah nice job, sounds like something I'd do
the constant cgaps every two lines make it harder to read.... 4 lines at a time is good
Keep it up... youre a great writer
All the best. Andrew
the constant cgaps every two lines make it harder to read.... 4 lines at a time is good
Keep it up... youre a great writer
All the best. Andrew
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