As I Lay In Bed At Night ((please comment))

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As I Lay In Bed At Night ((please comment))

by mychem on 11-29-2007 9:49 pm

As I lay in bed at night,
I think of him, holding me tight.

I feel his arms,
Around my waist,
I dream of him,
Making no haste.

If only he was here,
With me in bed,
“If only he was here”,
That’s all I said.

Crying silently,
He texts me why,
I text him back,
Saying only lies.

Without his touch,
Without his feel,
I promise to never,
Eat a meal.

I eat no more,
Starving for you,
I cry all day,
I say boo-hoo.

My meds look good,
My meds look nice,
I down the bottle,
Not thinking twice.

To the hospital,
My dad crying,
They ask me why,
I lay there dying.

Wishing you would come,
I get my stomach pumped,
My body feels horrid,
Like its been dumped.

As I lay in bed at night,
I dream of him, holding me tight.

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by XxUnderoathxX on 12-01-2007 8:27 pm

its real good and real sad

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urm...

by unwantedprincess on 12-12-2007 9:20 pm

wow thats really good..sad but good!

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by disco lemonade on 12-12-2007 9:34 pm

This is good
Try breaking out of the standard ABAB form from time to time in such a long poem, though. Smile

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by mychem on 12-13-2007 7:01 am

disco lemonade wrote: This is good
Try breaking out of the standard ABAB form from time to time in such a long poem, though. Smile


Thanks, its actaully ABCB style, I just kind of like writing in that style, to me it just flows better.

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by xxHeart Breakerxx on 12-13-2007 10:41 am

this poem is exactly how i feel but i've never overdosed. i've gotten drunk or high or cut myself but that's it.

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