the room is dark
but it serves her well
she has deep thoughts
but she just wont tell
she cuts her wrists
she feels the pain
but never greater
then her heartaches
she hides her frown
she show no fear
she feels alone
and she hides her tears
she screams for help
but no one hears
she has given up
she feels death is near
the ones she once loved are still there
but sum why they are not the same
they have all changed
and now all they bring is shame
my 1st poem=](still working on it)
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my 1st poem=](still working on it)
by Nancy16 on 07-23-2008 9:56 am
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by forgotten and never found on 07-23-2008 10:36 am
thats good. keep writeing. before you know it you might be the best here. i liked how you said that she hides her frown. but yet she is still cutting and has deep thoughts.
i really like
i really like
"dont be against the imposible"i said "be here and dont go there"
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by ZRC on 07-23-2008 6:44 pm
BULL. SHIT. No cutting poems get generally high regard here. This won't be liked by many.
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