It has the same type of theme you seem to write about, but it is a great example of having that theme, and having a flow and a basis to build upon
Here it is:
Spoiler:
'''mah emo poems fr the real emo ppl....'''
by rockitemokid on 11-02-2009 11:31 am
OP, I think it would do you heaps of good to go read the poem 'Because I could not stop for death' by Emily Dickinson.
It has the same type of theme you seem to write about, but it is a great example of having that theme, and having a flow and a basis to build upon
Here it is:
It has the same type of theme you seem to write about, but it is a great example of having that theme, and having a flow and a basis to build upon
Here it is:
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RE: '''mah emo poems fr the real emo ppl....'''
by xXxtradgedystrikesxXx on 11-02-2009 8:27 pm
those were pretty good. i think i liked the last two best.
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by xxmcrlovrxx on 11-05-2009 11:43 am
cupcakexoxo wrote: gawd some people on here are so mean. anyway, those were really good! really sad, but good.
thank you!! Jeez i thought they were rlly good 2 n I culd read them perfectally fine.
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by xxmcrlovrxx on 11-05-2009 11:46 am
KittensKill wrote: *sigh*
i give up.
your poems will remain shitty if you cant take some simple advice
Jesus Christ will you fuck off. Why dnt you write a fuckin poem so I can fucking cut you down too!!
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by Joli Petit Canard on 11-05-2009 12:30 pm
xxmcrlovrxx wrote:KittensKill wrote: *sigh*
i give up.
your poems will remain shitty if you cant take some simple advice
Jesus Christ will you fuck off. Why dnt you write a fuckin poem so I can fucking cut you down too!!
http://forum.emobucket.com/poems-by-kittenskill-t19938.html
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by xXxtradgedystrikesxXx on 11-05-2009 4:44 pm
mcrlovr, first off, mcr is amazing! xD second, i agree with you, i had no problems whatsoever reading any of these, and there is a line between constructive criticism and just being plain mean, and kittens, you crossed that line.
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RE: '''mah emo poems fr the real emo ppl....'''
by EmptyStar on 11-10-2009 12:38 am
cum on whu gives a fuck if he dusent wana use grammer -lawl i cant evan spell it!!!!-
i think his writing is gud
real gud
hes bein creative
showin his feeling 2 u people & ur being messed up idiots for not seein the inner story in it
its really beautiful
yea he cud use a few tips but not evry single comment has to be "constrive criticism"
gash
i think his writing is gud
real gud
hes bein creative
showin his feeling 2 u people & ur being messed up idiots for not seein the inner story in it
its really beautiful
yea he cud use a few tips but not evry single comment has to be "constrive criticism"
gash
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by stupidemo on 11-10-2009 1:55 am
ZRC wrote: Can you at least take the time to use correct fucking punctuation? It insults me as a writer to see you write poetry without using correct grammar. Poetry is the art of using the English Language in a way that captivates and moves. If you can't do that, it's just stupid.
ive read alot of good poetry that would make you cry...
not from the themes but from the grammar
proper grammar isnt a neccesity for a poem, as a poem is about communication with emotions as opposed to logic.
many outstanding poems use litte grammar in order to convey that the origin is alien to the reader
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by EmptyStar on 11-10-2009 1:59 am
stupidemo wrote:ZRC wrote: Can you at least take the time to use correct fucking punctuation? It insults me as a writer to see you write poetry without using correct grammar. Poetry is the art of using the English Language in a way that captivates and moves. If you can't do that, it's just stupid.
ive read alot of good poetry that would make you cry...
not from the themes but from the grammar
proper grammar isnt a neccesity for a poem, as a poem is about communication with emotions as opposed to logic.
many outstanding poems use litte grammar in order to convey that the origin is alien to the reader
exactly
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by KittensKill on 11-10-2009 9:01 am
I do write.xxmcrlovrxx wrote:
Jesus Christ will you fuck off. Why dnt you write a fuckin poem so I can fucking cut you down too!!
I dare you to read it
joli has kindly provided a link
Joli Petit Canard wrote:
http://forum.emobucket.com/poems-by-kittenskill-t19938.html
you must be well versed in idiot.xXxtradgedystrikesxXx wrote: i had no problems whatsoever reading any of these,
that was me being nice.xXxtradgedystrikesxXx wrote: and there is a line between constructive criticism and just being plain mean, and kittens, you crossed that line.
if I was being mean, you'd know about it
But if the poem is unreadable due to poor spelling and syntax, it is not worth posting.stupidemo wrote: proper grammar isnt a neccesity for a poem, as a poem is about communication with emotions as opposed to logic.
many outstanding poems use litte grammar in order to convey that the origin is alien to the reader
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by Alex Paig3 on 7 Days ago at 12:28 pm
there is a BIG difference in constructive criticism and
just acting like your the smartest person that stands on this
earth, and should be listend to every time there is
some kind of thought that pops up in your little brain.
God, some people really piss me off. . .
but, since i left a comment on your poem,
something may as well be about you poetry.
- i think its good.
and since i didnt look at this when the
mistakes were made,
then i dont think that people
should thinkthey should be asses about there oponions.
people can be critical,
but do they need to be critical in a rude way?
just acting like your the smartest person that stands on this
earth, and should be listend to every time there is
some kind of thought that pops up in your little brain.
God, some people really piss me off. . .
but, since i left a comment on your poem,
something may as well be about you poetry.
- i think its good.
and since i didnt look at this when the
mistakes were made,
then i dont think that people
should thinkthey should be asses about there oponions.
people can be critical,
but do they need to be critical in a rude way?
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by cutiepiex0x0 on 6 Days ago at 3:55 am
KittensKill wrote: *sigh*
i give up.
your poems will remain shitty if you cant take some simple advice
kk I'm pretty sure theses are all jokes.
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