(love poem)

like this better than my last emo poem?

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(love poem)

by MyEmoLuverJodi on 07-23-2008 11:00 pm

"even after (the end of time)"

she fills this hole,
in my black heart.
holds me when i'm cold,
keeps me from falling apart.

she loves me too,
one of the few.
together forever,
departing never.

she makes me so happy,
and doesnt have to try.
this isnt free,
but it something money can't buy.

i have her heart,
and she has mine.
we promised each other,
even after the end of time.
"The raining only starts when you go away"
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Eh.*

by Jackie xx Jaded on 07-24-2008 1:45 am

Not the best.
But there's no cutting.
So, I guess that's progress.
Keep working on it. You'll get it eventually. (:
Don't trust a ho. Never trust a ho. Won't trust a ho. Don't trust me. *

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Re: (love poem)

by lilemogurl477 on 07-25-2008 5:59 am

MyEmoLuverJodi wrote: "even after (the end of time)"

she fills this hole,
in my black heart.
holds me when i'm cold,
keeps me from falling apart.

she loves me too,
one of the few.
together forever,
departing never.

she makes me so happy,
and doesnt have to try.
this isnt free,
but it something money can't buy.

i have her heart,
and she has mine.
we promised each other,
even after the end of time.


awwww i love this one like ur other one
+Lil~Natsume~In~Luv~4~Eva+

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by Unforgiveable on 07-25-2008 12:31 pm

Your really good. Keep up the good work.
Every wish becomes a curse
Every curse becomes a blessing

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by helven on 07-25-2008 5:06 pm

I wouldnt say it's better
But it is an improvement on other you have written

I really think you could win a heart with this poem.....

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by MyEmoLuverJodi on 07-26-2008 12:41 am

helven wrote: I wouldnt say it's better
I really think you could win a heart with this poem.....


i already have my girlfriend, thats enough for me (>///_^)> thanx though
"The raining only starts when you go away"
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