i'm still waiting...

i'm still waiting...

by SplitFire7 on 11-24-2008 11:04 pm

In that very moment,
You caught my hollow sight,
On that gloomy day,
You shone down a light,

I felt cold that time,
I felt hot at the same time,
When you’re there the winds blow,
When you’re gone grey skies show,

The trees all standing tall,
They’re looking down at us all,
I stare you from a deserted corner,
Watching your every moves ignoring others,

Waiting anxiously for a miracle,
A miracle that’ll do us together,
I knew that that would never happen,
As I know I wasn’t meant for you,

I watch you each day,
You took my life away,
I’ve no reason to live,
You’ve made my eyes tear,

My heart’s punctured,
You stabbed it with your words,
Words that I never had expected,
But I liked it though, I loved it,

My time’s up, our time’s up,
All friends and enemies are gone,
You too- gone with heavenly breeze,
I’m hoping to see you again,
May that day comes fast, n faster…

SplitFire7
Fresh Meat
 
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RE: i'm still waiting...

by ZRC on 11-24-2008 11:11 pm

I couldn't tell what the rhyming scheme was, if any, but regardless, it was good. Very well done.

ZRC
I GHALUKDADOUCHE PA...*cough*
 
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