I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch and Dinner [sonnet]

I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch and Dinner [sonnet]

by rockbandgeek on 07-27-2008 1:02 am

i'll be borrowing the name of my title from Shaant for now until i find a good title of my own [I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch and Dinner].
this is one of my original poems. this is a sonnet (Shakespearean sonnet):
(for those who didn't know)
10 syllables
A
B
A
B

C
D
C
D

E
F
E
F

G
G

please give comments about it, please Very Happy

here it goes:


I never thought that things would end this way,
Still confused about what's been said and done.
But what more is there do I have to say,
If feelings are forever lost and gone?

My once strong bones turned brittle and broken
from the pain that I have not understood.
About how these words are once were spoken;
If only I could, if only I should.

If only all this time I stayed awake,
This episode would have never happened.
Of letting my fragile heart drop and break
Hope this hurt has finally come to end.

With this damaged heart I can't hear a beat,
But what do I care if I can still breathe?
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by Gasolinerainbows on 07-27-2008 3:19 am

I like it.
It's good Smile
First stanza really rings true for me.
when the remembering was done,
the forgetting could begin.

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by ZRC on 07-27-2008 12:19 pm

Actually, a Shakespearean sonnet has more to it. Yes it must take the form you had and ten syllables. But it must also start in a question, and have the second stanza answering that question (iffy on that one, it might have been something else). but it's good. Sonnet's are challenging to make.

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by xBlackOceansx on 07-28-2008 5:04 am

Shocked WOW IT WAS AMAZING!! FRIKIN AWESOME!!
Good work hunnie!! you deserve another one of my 42 cats Very Happy
haaha
xxx
MARSHMELLOWSS AND GUMMI BEARS!!!!..Wow i'm random Very Happy

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by rockbandgeek on 07-29-2008 12:42 am

xBlackOceansx wrote: Shocked WOW IT WAS AMAZING!! FRIKIN AWESOME!!
Good work hunnie!! you deserve another one of my 42 cats Very Happy
haaha
xxx

oh thanks you Hasna!
cool!
i want a chubby kitty!
hahahahha!that would look so cuute!Very Happy
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by rockbandgeek on 07-29-2008 12:43 am

ZRC wrote: Actually, a Shakespearean sonnet has more to it. Yes it must take the form you had and ten syllables. But it must also start in a question, and have the second stanza answering that question (iffy on that one, it might have been something else). but it's good. Sonnet's are challenging to make.

haha! oh cool! thanks!
yeah our teacher just said that we make our own "modern Shakespearean sonnet"
lol!
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by rockbandgeek on 07-29-2008 12:47 am

Gasolinerainbows wrote: I like it.
It's good Smile
First stanza really rings true for me.

cool! Very Happy thanks! =)
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by LostHearts on 07-29-2008 1:05 am

wow loved it ^^

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by rockbandgeek on 08-06-2008 5:33 am

LostHearts wrote: wow loved it ^^

thanks dear! Very Happy
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by fallingangel on 10-18-2008 2:51 pm

that was good.
i love to play with guns and knives

but the gun that took my friends life

lies high up on my wall

just to show how she did fall

she took the bullets out that gun

leaving a note for me and her mum...

if vodka was water and i was a duck id swim to the bottom and drink my way up but water aint vodka and i ain't no duck so pass the damn vodka and shut the fuck up

Could i, should i? cos luvs such and old fasioned word.


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by BleedHeartEmoRanger on 10-19-2008 1:15 am

that was amazing. im not that good at poetry. my bf said that im not good. u should comment mine. its called Forever is not long enough.
my bf said that he doesnt understand it. he said it doesnt make since at all. it kinda upset me.
but i like yours. i wish i could do better

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by rockbandgeek on 10-20-2008 1:51 am

fallingangel wrote: that was good.

thank you Very Happy


BleedHeartEmoRanger wrote: that was amazing. im not that good at poetry. my bf said that im not good. u should comment mine. its called Forever is not long enough.
my bf said that he doesnt understand it. he said it doesnt make since at all. it kinda upset me.
but i like yours. i wish i could do better

oh thank you dear Very Happy it takes time and practice..a lot of practice lol!
what you see is not exactly what you get
so don't assume or else you'll regret.
I Eat Awkward For Breakfast, Lunch And Dinner ~Trace's Poem/ Paragraph Of Thoughts stuff...

I am Shaantbow. Fear me for I am on Shaant's head.
I am Shaant's bff necklace. Fear me for I am on his neck. [from a girl on MySpace]


DRAMA DOESNT FOLLOW ME IT RIDES ON MY BACK.
I MAY BE UGLY BUT THEY SURE LOVE TO STARE.
www.myspace.com/traceytan

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by kiLLor2bkiLLed on 10-20-2008 6:24 am

nice!!!




very

nice
i DOnt CaRe if U LiKe It Or Not!!!!!!

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