Hi everyone, i wrote another poem, let me know what you think .

I write poetry,
Lines of my pain,
They'll all be read,
While my blood drains.

You make me die,
Inside i fall apart,
You don't realise,
We were to be from the start.

Close to the edge,
My heart tells me to drop,
We should be together,
Come make the pain stop.

When will you wake up,
Realise that we are one,
I pray it's not too late,
Save me before my heart has gone.

abcb again?

lol yeah, what do you think?

well maybe it can be re-written in another style that isn't abcb

why's that? you're the first person that i've shown it to that's criticised it, what do you think about the content rather than the style it's written it because i really don't see the problem with it .

dude u are awesome at poetry

i thought it was really good