Amysteriousgal's Free Verse Etc. Gallery

Amysteriousgal's Free Verse Etc. Gallery

by amysteriousgal on 03-19-2009 7:34 am

As an amateur self-taught poet, I like the form of "free verse" the most (although I experiment with others), and I hope for some feedback on what I write. I know I type too "properly" for an average forum, I just like to avoid bad grammar when I can help it. I also put much store in "easy-to-read-ness". My poems more commonly express opinions rather than tell stories.

Enjoy!

Head First

Love
Filled with delusion
Filled with dissension
The ultimate servitude
In disguise.

Solitude
Without control
Without coercion
The one true freedom
Just out of reach.

And perhaps
That, you will consider
Before diving
Head first
Into love.


Creativity

Creativity
The greatest merit
Of all humanity,
For to create
Is to open
A new world
Or to continue
Another
In your own special way
And let the world see
What you dream
In the depths
Of your mind.


Thanks for reading Very Happy FNORD.

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RE: Amysteriousgal's Free Verse Etc. Gallery

by amysteriousgal on 03-20-2009 5:02 am

My first attempt at writing in some sort of structure. It's really four lines, but they looked too long that way.

Hope

Perhaps an illusion,
Perhaps a dream,
Perhaps all too real;
The light in the darkness,
The whisper at night,
That on a touch will heal.
Pulling you onwards,
Giving you strength,
No fear shall you feel.
Reach for the destiny,
Hide from the doom
That only time will reveal.


Thanks for reading, comments will be appreciated Very Happy FNORD.

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by MrTony on 03-20-2009 5:03 am

wow I like your stuff very well done as far as iam concerned 5 star! ^^ keep at it.

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by amysteriousgal on 03-21-2009 3:46 am

MrTony wrote: wow I like your stuff very well done as far as iam concerned 5 star! ^^ keep at it.

Thanks Very Happy FNORD.

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RE: Amysteriousgal's Free Verse Etc. Gallery

by amysteriousgal on 03-21-2009 4:10 am

I have a new one Smile Has a decent structure. I will soon begin to worship rhyming dictionaries o_O

Cover

How could you lie in a state so dire?
But I know you're far too good a liar
To tell the truth anymore.
How can I trust what I see in your eyes?
I know your soul is nothing but lies;
You're a trickster to the core.
And what can I do to reveal your deceit?
I clearly cannot simply retreat;
Or just walk out the door.
How can the whole world be this blind?
Perhaps one day soon I will find
Honesty beached on the shore.


Thanks for reading, comments will be appreciated Very Happy FNORD.

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RE: Amysteriousgal's Free Verse Etc. Gallery

by amysteriousgal on 03-27-2009 4:50 am

Easter

It will soon be Easter.
The day when Jesus died
And came back to life.
I wonder how everyone felt,
Seeing a dead man walk among them
Calm as can be
And greet them casually
As though he had returned from a holiday.

It's funny how things change.
People back then believed in miracles.
People nowadays worship science.
They expect science
To unravel the mystery
Of how a dead man returned to life
One Monday in the distant past.

Perhaps it will, perhaps not
For some things cannot be explained
And some are better left without explanation.
Still, I thank whoever is responsible,
Jesus, God, or the people who wrote the Bible
And perhaps invented a story,
For all my chocolate eggs.


[sarcasm]Wonderful public response, isn't there?[/sarcasm] Still, any feedback will be greatly appreciated Very Happy FNORD.

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