Afraid....

Im afraid of what you will say
im afraid of what you will do
im afraid that i cant help myself
im afraid that i hurt you

im sick of all these tears
but nothing seems to help
im sick of all the heartbreak
but this is the worst iv ever felt

im ripping at my skin now
can you feel my burning pain
im falling to the ground now
my blood cascades like rain

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Why does your heart beat slower tonight
i can feel your pulse and your trying to fight
then why is your breathing so slow
i remember the tears as i watched your blood flow

i sit in the rain looking up at the stars
feeling my tears sparkle in the light from the cars
closing my eyes and thinking of you
Wishing i could die to

running through the darkness
slaming the door closed
reading the letter i wrote
and putting the gun to my throat

pulling the trigger
closing my eyes
feeling your heart stop
together we die....

ooh... real nice

If it wasn't so typical emow kid, it wouldn't be half awful. You can rhyme well, and a developed idea is there, maybe just a better one next time.

Aw cum on it cant be that bad

aww it's cute and it rhyme wich is good imo but another theme would make it better (:

Wat theme

suicide/dying

i liked the first half but i felt the second half didnt fit, like it was two different poems.
goo though well done

really like it especially the last line "my blood cascades like rain"

Thanx im really glad someone likes my poetry...i do work prety hard on it

Well the theme is pretty much 'i would rather die than have to spend even a day without you'
i just write whatever comes to mind so it just what i stand for i guess...

One night she slipped away
forgetting everyones morals and lies
as the night turns to day
she remembers no one hearing her desprate cries...
Softly breathing in the shivering cold air
she mutters about her worthless life
as the wind blows through her hair
she reaches under her bed for the knife

Caressing the blade she weeps again
thinking of all her forgotten scars
realising she cannot control the pain
she looks out the window and stares up at the stars...
This is for my love
she says as she cuts her skin
stil staring up at the heavens avbove
she slowly writed on the wall in her own warm blood
'he is my sin...'

'he is not mine but hers' she carries on to write
feeling faint as her sheets become stained in her blood
breathing deeply she can no longer fight
she is stuck in her own paranoid flood...
Shacking she writes her last words
drifting away from her meaningles life
the hurt and pain aching like burning swords
with her last breath she lets go of the knife...

her last words for all those who knew
as she would always take the blame
'i love you...'
she left to soon to write his name...

Fade2Black wrote: really like it especially the last line "my blood cascades like rain"

yeah, i agree, that was a really good line. you write some pretty good stuff. i like it